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    An Article About the Best Martial Arts Style

    Here's an article I wrote that got published recently and got a lot of hits. I've started doing freelance writing to write more about martial arts, the BS that surrounds it, myth and reality, and how there really isn't a BEST style.

    The fight is what makes the man, not his style.

    I also ended up writing about the real advantages to learning martial arts (even though it doesn't make someone a better fighter automatically), why the average person is not Bruce Lee, and why the belt ranking tradition in martial arts should be shot to hell (in a nice way).

    I mentioned Bullshido.net and its important role in the MA community as the cleaner of bullshit of all types. I've been out of the forums for over a year but it doesn't mean I forgot where I learned most of the essentials.

    Read the article and let me know what you think:
    How Martial Arts Can Change Your Life
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    And you would like us to investigate this article and you?

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    No offense, but that was kinda bad

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kentucky Fried Chokin
    And you would like us to investigate this article and you?
    Sure, if you want to check it out. It's not a bad article based on how many people searched it.

    I realized that this is probably the wrong section. Can this please be moved to the Article/editorial/community section?

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    Quote Originally Posted by PeopleSoft
    No offense, but that was kinda bad
    Criticism? Would be cool to see what could be improved. I admit the title sucks but you gotta do what you gotta do to promote it. It was the publisher's choice.

    Investigation and discussion wise, I did bring up some points about the belt ranking system, the illusion that knowing martial arts automatically makes someone invincible, and other stuff.

    While us at Bullshido beat these topics like a dead horse, the rest of the world knows little about it. No other article in the entire AC site directly talked about these topics and Bullshido.net.

    So read it or not I guess.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Vik
    Criticism? Would be cool to see what could be improved.
    Some of your analogies were convoluted, confusing, and down right dumb (people become cops to own a gun? WTF?). I also don't know the length constrictions of your article, but it seems like you only touched on subjects that needed a lot more explaining (like why the belt system is stupid). The part about 'why should I train MA if I'm already a good fighter?' was strange. How many people are good fighters without ever training? I would have changed that to something along the lines of 'If you're a good fighter, why not test yourself in competition against training MA and see how good you are?'

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    Quote Originally Posted by Vik
    Criticism? Would be cool to see what could be improved.
    You could start by losing the analogies. You are belaboring your points. Give your audience some credit for understanding fairly obvious points after reasonably minimal explanation. Again, just my $0.02

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    Associated Content will post pretty much anything, outside of obvious al-Qaeda directives to sleeper cells.

    If you call that "freelance writing", you're an idiot.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kentucky Fried Chokin
    Some of your analogies were convoluted, confusing, and down right dumb (people become cops to own a gun? WTF?). I also don't know the length constrictions of your article, but it seems like you only touched on subjects that needed a lot more explaining (like why the belt system is stupid). The part about 'why should I train MA if I'm already a good fighter?' was strange. How many people are good fighters without ever training? I would have changed that to something along the lines of 'If you're a good fighter, why not test yourself in competition against training MA and see how good you are?'
    You bring up a good point. When I wrote about the whole CS and cop analogy, it wasn't something I made up. I came across the example a few times in rl, including in these forums sometime in 2005, so I had to bring it up.

    I'm not a professional writer but I'm getting there, still working on better analogies. But did you guys get the main point with the CS and cop analogy?

    There is still a lot of truth to them if you think about it. I wanted to write something the average reader can relate to, something casual.

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    The entire thing needs to be rewritten. You have poor paragraph breaks, run on sentences, and your point meanders.

    *edit*

    I doubt this will get moved to the Article section. That is usually saved for things we approve on bullshido as a website. Your article has to many flaws.
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