VoiDH: Teh Forum Edition #3

[WorldWarCheese]

The people look like penises.

[Frank White]

I made a cartoon in the 4th grade once. A guy raped a hooker, and the police arrested him for shoplifting. I thought it was funny...

[Snake Plissken]

The people look like penises.

well we know what you and Airman Kai have on the mind.

[WorldWarCheese]

Yeah... talking penises would be wicked pisseh.

[Snake Plissken]

take up snowboarding and maybe you can "learn"?

[Odacon]

It took me a minute or so to get it... I'm tired.

[Uri Shatil]

I exhaled and my shoulders bounced, you win. But it still feels like you aren't listening...

Make it more animated.
Inorporate timing, don't beat dead horses, and take advantage of the fact that you have a comic.
Stronger punchlines.
Timing and surprise.
Surprise, less predictability.
Use a more appropriate format.

So far, this one and the super bowl/UFC 81 were the best. I'd like to see these get better, and I'm looking forward to these being funny. Maybe even bookmark worthy. Do you read a lot of webcomics? Right now, it feels like you're ditching any sort of format and doing whatever you feel like (frame-wise). Read some webcomics, pay attention to the format.

I want to see these become funny.

[partyboy]

Yeah... talking penises would be wicked pisseh.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kjYwAnLksoc


Superbad is the ****... learn from it Kai

[syberia]

I have to say... some of those ^^ cartoons were quality stuff.