lol@the idiot who read all of my posts...

lol@the idiot who read all of my posts...

Wow are you kidding?
Case in point.

If you are getting paid some sort of page view fee for that thing, I'm going to have my boss bill you for the salaried time I wasted reading it.

Seriously, there are like three or four potentially good articles in there, but they are writhing around in some sort of horrific M.C. Escher blowing H.R. Giger orgy.

Why are you still reading this thread, dumbass?
You have over 14,000 posts and all of them suck.

And oh yeah, thanks for getting the page view count up for my article. It's a good ten cents worth more than your opinion.

You sure you're not offended? hehe.

Anyway, ive read the 3 pages and i think Rivingtons remarks where spot on.
im writing myself but in my own language.

It seems to me there's nothing to improve but more of an illusion that needs to be cast away.

It also seems to me you have none to little experience in ma's.

Next time use examples:

Write as if you're speeching for retarded people, dont assume your audience 'knows what you mean'.

Go more in depth into the matter, you barely scratched the surface.

Present a statement/problem, desbribe this statement, describe pro's and con's, get to the part where you try to convince the reader by providing proof that supports your following conclusion, a story needs an end.

Avoid mentioning Bruce Lee at all costs.

Don't forget to insult people and make a lot of gay comments aswell.
example: 'There are also people who pretend to practise a MA they're called wing chunners and they are considered by many to be a bunch of faggots.'

Also pictures, lots of pictures.

That's so hot.

I'm not offended.

Yes, you are.

Before criticism of your writing:


I mentioned Bullshido.net and its important role in the MA community as the cleaner of bullshit of all types.

After criticism of your writing:


Bullshido is still the same old 'community' with egotistical trolls who do nothing but whine about what style is best and why they're better than everyone else. Bullshido is not respected by the main martial arts community because it is full of trash-taking little girls who can't post without a useless trolling comment.

If this thread had been full of praise, we never would have seen that second quote.

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Look, man, we've all got that something that we use to justify our existence.
And it's a natural reaction to defend that something.
(It's also a natural reaction to assume that I'm trying to bully you by bringing this up. I'm not.)
But just because it's natural doesn't mean it's healthy.

In BJJ, there's an oft-repeated gem - don't let your ego get in the way of your training. If you put yourself in disadvantageous positions, try things you're not comfortable with, roll against people who are bigger/stronger/more experienced than you, you're going to lose.

And lose.
And lose.
And lose.

But you'll also get better.

Now, if losing on the mat devalues your self-worth, you'll naturally try to avoid losing. You'll train from superior positions, stick to easy opponents and your best moves, and... you won't lose as much. At least, not at first.

But you won't get better.

We may be a bunch of cunts here who are trying to wreck your ****. You can either get pissed off about it, or you can take the opportunity to learn and improve. We're cunts. We don't care. It's entirely up to you.

You sure you're not offended? hehe.

Anyway, ive read the 3 pages and i think Rivingtons remarks where spot on.
im writing myself but in my own language.

It seems to me there's nothing to improve but more of an illusion that needs to be cast away.

It also seems to me you have none to little experience in ma's.

Next time use examples:

Write as if you're speeching for retarded people, dont assume your audience 'knows what you mean'.

Go more in depth into the matter, you barely scratched the surface.

Present a statement/problem, desbribe this statement, describe pro's and con's, get to the part where you try to convince the reader by providing proof that supports your following conclusion, a story needs an end.

Avoid mentioning Bruce Lee at all costs.

Don't forget to insult people and make a lot of gay comments aswell.
example: 'There are also people who pretend to practise a MA they're called wing chunners and they are considered by many to be a bunch of faggots.'

Also pictures, lots of pictures.
Hold on one minute. Who the **** is using lebell's account to post a coherent post.

Damn it I want answers.

Also, aging hippie is not alowed to post the funny.

Dude, I'm a dick, not a ****.

You sure you're not offended? hehe.

Anyway, ive read the 3 pages and i think Rivingtons remarks where spot on.
im writing myself but in my own language.

It seems to me there's nothing to improve but more of an illusion that needs to be cast away.

It also seems to me you have none to little experience in ma's.

Next time use examples:

Write as if you're speeching for retarded people, dont assume your audience 'knows what you mean'.

Go more in depth into the matter, you barely scratched the surface.

Present a statement/problem, desbribe this statement, describe pro's and con's, get to the part where you try to convince the reader by providing proof that supports your following conclusion, a story needs an end.

Avoid mentioning Bruce Lee at all costs.

Don't forget to insult people and make a lot of gay comments aswell.
example: 'There are also people who pretend to practise a MA they're called wing chunners and they are considered by many to be a bunch of faggots.'

Also pictures, lots of pictures.
Good points there, and I remember the whole Bullshido rule about never mentioning Bruce Lee. And no, I'm really not offended.

Just so you know, I do have experience in martial arts, over five years of it. I don't even want to say what style because it's going to start another troll war in this thread and it already got old.

Also I forgot to mention:

I wrote the article to be SEO (Search Engine Optimized). So the in-depth analysis you guys are used to looking for is not going to be in it. What you see in the article was purposely done to get the most Google searches. So hell no, I'm not going to have the deepest information, the revenue I get from it DEPENDS on it being written to draw readers and end up scratching the surface.

I am a good martial artist in real life and many people I know can back that up. Of course it doesn't mean anything online to you guys.

The bottom line is that I wrote the article to be a short introduction, and it took me a good half an hour to write it- that's about it.

And I'm getting paid to trash talk to you guys.
Which is why I'm not offended.

If I wanted to, I could've spent more time to write something better and I know some people who posted in this thread can pump out decent articles of their own. They know how many different directions the points in the articles could go to be better.

You win.

I'm just reading for the lulz now. Why ask for a critique if you wrote it shitty for google searches?

Slow down, before you split your head on that wall you are about to back into.

Also I forgot to mention:

I wrote the article to be SEO (Search Engine Optimized). So the in-depth analysis you guys are used to looking for is not going to be in it. What you see in the article was purposely done to get the most Google searches. So hell no, I'm not going to have the deepest information, the revenue I get from it DEPENDS on it being written to draw readers and end up scratching the surface.

Do you like to DEFEND YOURSELF with MARTIAL ARTS in order to protect YOUR NAKED WOMEN from THUGS and GANGSTAS? There are FREE things you can do to GET IN SHAPE and LOSE WEIGHT such as push-ups, and don't forget to BUY GUNS. If you look at the ULTIMATE FIGHTING CHAMPIONSHIPS you'll KNOW that WRESTLING is awesome.


Ooor, you know, you could learn to write and make real money. Face it, sonny, you just spent several minutes bragging that you make a dime per read.

Real freelance writers generally don't get out of bed for less than a quarter a word.

The bottom line is that I wrote the article to be an short introduction, and it took me a good half an hour to write it- that's about it.

half an hour is pretty long for that article.





And I'm getting paid to trash talk to you guys.
Which is why I'm not offended.
wow.
you got it made huh?
im jealous.



If I wanted to, I could've spent more time to write something better and I know some people who posted in this thread can pump out decent articles of their own. They know how many different directions the points in the articles could go to be better.
With a shitty mentality like that im pretty sure you're not much of a martial artist neither.
you could do better but just settled for this, yeah thats how hemingway did it too.




As for something more important:
Logic failure or bannable offence detected.

Allow me:

you make a thread doing the : hai guiz i hez wrote artikul plz reed it kthxbai.

so people read it and most of them think its crap but still offer you some advice on how to improve your skills.

then you go: hahaha im not offended! im getting paid for this and everytime one of you guiz read my article i get paid.

that makes you a spammer.

ban plz.

You win.

I'm just reading for the lulz now. Why ask for a critique if you wrote it shitty for google searches?

Slow down, before you split your head on that wall you are about to back into.

Meh it's all good. I came for criticism, I got it. I'm a med student that writes to make some side cash. I never said I was a 'real' freelance writer that does it for a living.

I know how much you can really get paid but if everyone had the time do it, we'd all be filthy fricking rich.

Thanks guys.

The Josh Oakley and Tharuz threads were fun. This one is slowly climbing to my favorite.

Plus, it is Wednesday.


You meanies.

I know how much you can really get paid but if everyone had the time do it, we'd all be filthy fricking rich.

not time....talent.
which you dont have.
dont blame your lack of talent because you're learning how to become a nurse.
Hell, if you're interested in nurses and making money i know some people from adult entertainment who'd be interested in paying you for some work.
you do have your own uniform right?

You can make sweet bank being a bottom in gay for pay pr0n.